Kate Carpenter

over 30 days ago to Phil Bouldry

Hey Phil, thanks for taking the time to listen to Every Good thing bestowed. Glad you liked it!
Your friend in music,
Mrs. Kate

Bob Bentley

over 30 days ago to Phil Bouldry

Hi Phil,

Thanks for the kind words and the stars for Achill Lament. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Now trying to get lyrics together as I think it will make a good song.
Keep well,

Bob

Bob Bentley

over 30 days ago to Phil Bouldry

Hi Phil,
Thanks for your review of Thomas. I am in the process of reworking this instrumental as I realised quite quickly I'd overdone the instrumentation, plus it's too long. Your review is 100% other than I don't share your view that a song should be x number of verses/choruses and/or bridges. It's not a song as such, it's an instrumental piece and it does have a structure of verses, choruses and a bridge, but it also has variations before finishing back on the main theme and outro. Having said that, the guitar is a bit all over the place and part of my task of reworking it is try to find a more coherent melody running through it - it may not be easy!
It wasn't composed for any specific commercial purpose, really as an experiment for my own enjoyment. I'm not able to sing just now so I thought I would try to pull together melodies and chord patterns from recent times and see if I could put some guitar over it all. This does explain the lack of cohesiveness.
I've had very helpful feedback, all different, and that is one of the real benefits to me of Broadjam. Your review is very much appreciated. Together, they all help me to focus on areas where improvement is most required, rather than just churning out more and more versions.
Thanks again and a Happy New Year,
Bob

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Phil Bouldry

over 30 days ago

Bob,

As I said, I'm old school, I guess. I do agree with you that it's not mandatory that a song be verse chorus verse chorus bridge, etc. If you have heard my song My Miss America you've heard that I don't adhere to it as a strict rule. Anyway, I appreciate your kind response, and I wish you good success in rearranging "Thomas".

Happy New Year to YOU!
Phil