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Hi Patrick a while ago you reviewed my song `Dominoes' and suggested I remove the percussion track. I thought you might be interested to know that I actually went ahead and followed your suggestion (I was always in two minds about that part anyway and your helpful comment spurred me to think about it more). If you get a chance to have another listen, I'd be interested to know what you think of it now.
Thanks for the nice review of my song, "In the valey of Gods ". I'm listening to your songs and I find them really interesting ! best of luck!
Thank you for your review on "Listen To Your Heart". The song was written with the 1930's era in mind. I have to disagree with you on the lyrics though, they are clever and a few industry professionals agree with me. It is being considered for a TV show. Appreciate your input!
Hi Patrick, Thanks for the review of "What You Do" !! (For the record I don't care much for Tom Petty at all.) Jeff
Patrick thanks so much for your review of 'here I go again' ......we play music for the fun of it and to know you liked the song is great.....i'll let hank know.....and then he'll forget.......in early june of 2012 hank had a very bad stroke...we didn't think he was going to make it or atleast play guitar again...after a stay in the hospital, rehabilitation and a long stay in a group home to recover....he had a miraculous recovery....by mid November of 2012 he was able to leave the group home and move in with his girlfriend...this song is the first time in the woodshed after all of that....while recording I looked at the recorder and saw we were at 6:30...hank's not good with time now so I figured it was time to cut the song off...I gave him the signal and we began to end it....like I said i'll let him know...keep it fun..cheers stu
OOPS, my fingers are slower than my brain... it should be CEREBREAL. I can't spell worth a darn either...l live with spell checker. LOL.
Thanks for your mostly favorable review of our tune Song of Freedom. Since my collaborator wrote most of the lyrics and I wrote the melody, I don't take offense....guess it's different strokes. All of his lyrics are pretty celebrial. He's a poet. It's an anthem. Glad you liked the arrangement
Big oops...cerebreal. Sometimes my mind works faster than my fingers. Can't spell worth a darn either. I live with spell checker. LOL
Thanks a lot for the encouragement, any advice on playing shows? My band has yet to premier our soon to be released album on any notable stage and any advice could go far
Well lots of bands go put their music on tunecore. That is a great stage to promote from. You can get it on iTunes, spotify, control what countries you want your record to be available in and things of that nature. That would be my first move. Good luck bro!!!
Leo, Leo rocks bro! Great Listen!!!
Super enjoyable music Pat....you've got some serious talent there.
Hey Leo Leo is cooool and it needs to rise to the next level of distillation.
Thanks for the review!
Hi Patrick, thanks for your review of "This Time". Appreciate your kind words! There are a few things that need adjusting on it and it was one of my first demos ... but still one of my favorites!
Dear Roy, I like the new layout! Nice job! Would you ind listening to my song Bite Me and let me know your thoughts? Thanks!
TFS, Thanks for your nice comment. More improvements are on their way....Here is my review of Bite Me. One of the most interesting songs I've heard in a while. Obviously, the writer is pissed off at a friend and has decided to vent in song. A great groove with lots of breaks, this is very hard to do so hats off to the arranger of this. Great work. When I first heard this it reminded of an 80s sitcom. After I listened closely a few times, my opinion changed. This is one of the best written songs and best productions I have heard in a while. Great harmonies at 1:26, 2:21 and numerous places throughout the song. Instrumentation is excellent, especially the drum work. Little things like the keyboard slide at 1:20 are well done. The mix is near perfect. Vocal phrasing and pitch are right on. Little things like stretching to his falsetto at 19 seconds for just a second or two and going a little nasally at 29 seconds make this very unique. Lots of quirky innate feeling went into this vocal performance. My guess is this singer has done a lot of recording. If he hasn't, he is a natural. From a lyric perspective, it's to the point. "Bite me, you suck a lot" is the hook and they clearly have nailed it. Every line in the verses support the hook and overall it's a pretty good lyric. If I have to be critical at all, I would say the lines in the chorus(after the first one) aren't quite as strong as the verses. Maybe slight tweaking here, but no major changes are necessary because the first line of the chorus really carries it. Although there are no offensive words in the lyric, I'm not sure it will get radio play because of the nature...but I'm not sure the writer cares. I could go on and on about this. But simply, it's well written, with a great arrangement, excellent instrumentation and a near perfect mix. There is not much more to say other than I will listen to your entire list this afternoon. I know you've been on Bjam for awhile, thanks so much for being a member. http://www.broadjam.com/player/player.php?artistID=67506 1
Roy, when will the winners of the June 12' songwriter of the month contest be announced?
Hey Patrick - thanks for the heads up, the winner wasn't showing up but it's there now if you want to check the winners page again.
Hey Patrick, love the new song, original work and so well done mate, keep them coming young man !! Cheers, Rob
Thanks for your really nice review of my song: CAN'T TAKE IT NO MORE. I'm the lyricist, so I don't think you'd want to marry me, but I can give you the name of the vocalist. That was a fun comment. Thanks again, Sylvia
Hi Pat Thanks for the review of 'You must be Jokin' , It's like you said , a daft wee tune that puts a smile on your face. I wish I had been in the audience when you recorded 'Goodbye is not an Ending' , sounds like everyone including you are having a great time and thats 'entertainment' All the best with your music Dave
Patrick, thanks for the review of "Life Goes On". I'll add Tom Waits to Mose Allison and Ben Sidran in style comparisons. Another reviewer found some Waits in my tune "Scorcher". It's been interesting to see what others hear in my stuff. Thanks again, glad you liked it Bill
Thanks for the review Pat, just listening to your stuff, I love it ! Rob
Hi Patrick, Hey, thanks for the nice review of my song, "Paradise". Yes, it is kind of a weird song, but I wrote it back in the early 1970's when I was touring and dating an actress in LA. Our schedules could never be matched up.... even though when we did get time together, we had a lot of fun....in her place in Malibu. I did record a solo version and it was on my second album, "Waving Prairie". The version you heard is a updated version. It is a tough song to sing because of the range it covers. But, it has a haunting melody that I'd love to hear sung by someone who can really sing. Thanks, again.... Chet Nichols Inductee- The Kansas Music Hall of Fame
exactly, a one take recording on a digital recorder and an out of tune piano! haha thanks for your review
Thanks so much for your kind words and time in reviewing the song. :)
Just saw you updated your news. You're a celebrity. 140 songs, wow. That's quite an accomplishment.
Hate to disappoint you.... But I have penned around 2000 songs in my years of writing. My first copyright was for a song I wrote when I was 14...... Had several years where I was writing 2 songs a week.... which I can still do. I have access to a deep well of inspiration....and I LOVE writing songs.... What an interesting art form. Edgar Allen Poe once said that the ability to write a song and combine words with music is the highest art form. I happen to agree... Thanks for the kind words ... coming from you they hold some real weight...
Chet, I agree with you and Poe. When I write the lyrics and I get a great melody, vocalist and instrumentation, the feeling that I get is a wow feeling; nothing better than that. I'm very impressed with your musical talents. Continue success to you. Sylvia
Both of you, Chet and Sylvia, are in a special league. I enjoy seeing the sucess each of you garner. Lots of placements between you 2 alone here at BroadJam. For me and song crafting, the biggest moment isn't hearing a 'finished product' but often when i come up with that 'hook' . That 'wow' moment when you know something good is happening. Then I know I'm 'hooked' (pun intended). Cheers
From someone who has basically no music talent and no chance of ever succeding at actually being known in this art I'll have to agree with both of you here. I've been writing songs since basically the second I learned a chord when I was fifteen and haven't stopped since, and there is no greater feeling than knowing you got out what was on your mind and in your heart. I don't really care about all that hook stuff or whatever, but yes when you find a melody that is meaningful in your heart and you are able to put along words that are somehow equally as meaningful and you are able to sing it without a strained voice, now thats some stuff
Just saw this post and thought I would chime in. Steve is right, Chet and Sylvia are in a special league (the same one Steve is in). Great writers, all three of you.....Patrick, thanks for your heartfelt comments and reminding us why we all write.....Best to all of you, Roy
Yes, we're all in the same league. Thanks Roy.
Patrick, don't give up; you never know. I know you love writing songs, etc.
Wow Chet, over 2000 songs. That means I'm still an infant. Congrat's brother. I see why you are so great!!!
Agree that Chet and Sylvia are wonders. Glad to see Steve added to that "special league." When I first began on Broadjam a couple years ago, I reviewed a few songs and then came to a review of a song that was enormously impressive in theme, structure, sound and everything else that matters. It was downright inspiring. After the review I saw that it was Steve's song. Now, every time I run across Steve here, that one review flashes through my mind. I recall that moment and thinking "that's how it should be done."
Robert, thanks for all your nice comments.
Wow, 2000 songs! That's the way to go, just keep writing. I've heard an artist say (can't remember who, but was in a docu. ) that (if lucky) 1 out of 10 ideas is a good one.... I've written a lot of songs and compositions myself and many i've not presented on BJ. it's more like 20% that's on my BJ page.... many (bad) ideas are stowed away. sometimes I listen to them and hope that I can eloborate on an idea... but most of the times I stow them even further away :P Practice makes perfect.... I hope that one day I can place myself in that special league too! then again, every songwriter is special in his/her own way ;)
Thanks Robert for the kind words on this thread. I wish I knew what review song you were referring to. If you remember the name, i'll model everything from here on in after that!
Not wanting to hi-jack this thread, too much... I'll leave a comment on your page, Steve.
Back when I was touring....for 12 years... 1969-1981... I spent all my time writing. Wrote many songs that didn't gel or work. I learned that in many cases I had to write something just to get it out of my head... Oddly enough, a good song was lurking behind it. I have been a longtime journal keeper and have almost 50 years of songs, titles, sketches, poems....whatever jumped out at me... Written down. Oddly enough, as you get older.... You might find you become more prolific. Anyway, I really enjoy my Broadjam friends. PS.... Just posted a fun song I write back in 1964...called "You Made Me Cry".... Very 60's Beatle-ish. Check it out and tell me if you like it...
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It would be a great honor if some of you fine musicians listened to a song from my first album which is currently unreleased, 12 tracks. The track is called "goodbye is not an ending". the other songs on my website were just unfinished, half efforted tracks I recorded with my digital recorder to get reviewers opinions before finishing. But this is with a band, from my first album ever and it would mean so much if one of you great song writers took a listen, the greatest honor in all honesty. Thanks so much!
Chet.....An incredible quote, "I had to write something just to get it out of my head." There is probably a song lurking somewhere to be found in this quote.....Thanks for being a member, Roy
Well, being an insatiable and ever-curious creative cat... I have spent a lot of time studying the mental aspects of the creative process.... So, I am always open to new ideas and processes. I've also learned to get out of the way... and let the Muses come in and abide with me. Dang, sometimes they even want to jitterbug. Oh, yeah, check out my new song, "Million Dollar Sandbox".... It t'will make you smile. Oh, and thanks for making Broadjam such a great place to grow, share....and meditate.
Hey Chet, listened to both songs: you made me cry: not really my thing Million dollar sand box: Like that one! Like you said, makes you smile. Fun upbeat tune. and you only need (just about) 4 chords :P like your voice more on sandbox. regards floris
hey patrick. i may not be one of those fine musicians you speak of, but i listened anyway. nice song. this is one of those songs that work great in bars and bigger sheds, getting the crowd to sing along and enjoy a nice beer in good company. it's got loads of character! if and when i go to the states, this tune in that bar in that crowd would be something i don't want to miss out on! regards floris