Unique piece you got here. Pink Floyd-esque in some parts! This is a nice tune. I think it's multifaceted. I would imagine you could get some play out of this commercially. I think it's produced and recorded well. It keeps the listener engaged/intrigued. It's got a nice flow and a nice resolution. It's got some retro sounds in there but also I think could pass for modern uses.
This instantly grabbed ahold of me- What an interesting array of styles! The organic sounding guitar over the techno is really interesting and compelling. I think for the kind of thing you are going for, this is probably perfect - I wouldn't be surprised if I heard this on a TV show.