Doug Diamond

Doug Diamond

Title: Music Supervisor, Engineer, Producer, Composer
Genres: Rock, Pop, Country, Adult Contemporary, Soundtracks
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Bio: Engineer/Producer/Music Supervisor Doug Diamond has been writing, recording, producing, mixing and mastering music for most… read more

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song: Broken Line

genre: Pop - Europop
stats: playlists: 0 | song plays: 64
General Overview
What Genre is most appropriate for this song?
Pop

What is an appropriate title for this song?
Broken Line

What artist does this song most remind you of?
Florida Georgia Line

What best describes the subject matter of this song?
Inspirational - Hope

What era does this song fall under?
2000 and later

What best describes the mood of this song?
Agitated - Troubled

Song Analysis
Quality of Lyrics
4/5

Quality of the Hook
5/5

Quality of the Verses
5/5

Quality of the Chorus
5/5

Quality of Instrumentation
5/5

Quality of Arrangement
5/5

Quality of the Melody
5/5

Quality of the Chord Progression
5/5

Quality of the Instrumental Hooks
5/5

Marriage Between Chorus and Verse
5/5

Marriage Between Music and Lyrics
5/5

Instrumentation
Quality of the Instrument/Sound Selection
5/5

Quality of the Lead Performances
4/5

Quality of the Meter
5/5

Quality of Keyboards
5/5

Quality of Bass
5/5

Quality of Percussion
5/5

Quality of Intro/Opening Line
4/5

Vocals
Quality of the Vocal Pitch
2/5

Quality of Vocal Phrasing and Performance
4/5

Quality of the Backup Vocals
4/5

Quality of Vocal
3/5

Production
Quality of Recording (Techniques)
4/5

Quality of Mix
4/5

Originality of Song
4/5

Overall Rating
4/5

Quality of the Title
4/5

General Comments

Hi THC -

Thanks for letting me know about your track, "Broken Line". I really dig it. In my honest opinion, this song nearly has it all, from a Pop perspective. I think it's very close to something that could certainly find a home in some sort of sync scenario - a TV show, film, game, trailer, commercial, etc. As for what needs work, I'll address that below, but overall NICE WORK. You certainly have the makings of what could be a great, radio-friendly Pop song. I really love the main hook and huge keyboards in the chorus, just excellent.

I like the Euro-Pop / Dream-Pop / Electro-Pop feel and sound of it for sure. It does sound very close to something you would hear on the radio already without changing a thing. With a few clean-up details, I could probably pitch this to SiriusXM and/or other retail outlets for you (like gyms, malls, restaurants, stores and shops, etc.). My retail rotation clients tend to like songs with just a little more energy, but this one is really close already - right on the verge; kind of that mid-tempo vibe - not *too* slow.

I think the production value on this song (the technical aspects of the recording, mix, and master) are all very good and don't really hear much, if anything, I'd change there other than the Auto-tune, mentioned next.

The performances seem pretty solid, especially the instrumental backing tracks and rapping - very good stuff. The sung vocals are ok, but at times definitely seem over processed and unnatural. That may be what you were going for on this tune, with so much Auto-tune used; giving it that robotic feel/sound. To me, that's probably the one area that I would address first. It's ok to use Auto-tune as a 'secret sauce' or sweetener to use that here and there, but it seems like it's overused on this song, in my opinion. I'm not sure if that's because it's correcting so much of the pitch along the way - or - if it's really just being used as an effect. It sounds to me like your singer might actually be hitting the notes without the Auto-tune... but then the Auto-tune is pushing some places OUT of tune, which just won't do; it's distracting. And most producers, directors, and editors wouldn't choose to work with it based on that issue (flat notes in the music/vocal track would distract from picture, from the story in a visual). What does this song sound like with NO Auto-tune? Are the vocals in-pitch already and Auto-tune is just an effect? If so, dial it way back (probably the Re-tune Speed) and let the natural voice come out more because as-is, I couldn't pitch it for anything sync related due to the lead vocal and Auto-tune effect. It makes it seem too homegrown and semi-professional because it seems overused. So, work out those kinks for sure. Otherwise, nice song that could work for some different possibilities, but the vocals need to be addressed.


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Artist's Submitted Question:

Hello and thank you for taking the time to review this track. I wanted to get your spin on it and please be brutally honest and pick the song apart from the lyrics to the mix, anything that can be improved upon to make the track stronger would be appreciated. The hope is to get it placed on TV or with a singer or group to use on a project. I appreciate your time and looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Pro's Answer/Comments:

It's definitely good enough quality without changing a thing though, to pitch it to other artists and try to get them to re-cut it in their own, unique way - which could open up the possibility of having a known artist cut it and could then become a Hit single, you never know (even keeping the existing base/instrumental track like it is). I'd probably pursue this first and foremost... find a good publisher who has lots of contacts with the types of artists who might be interested in cutting your song.

As for sync-to-picture, the vocal/Auto-tune issue needs to be fixed first because like I said, the pros who are looking to sync songs like this won't like that some of the notes are flat, whether due to the tuner or the singer (not sure). The other vocal issue I noticed is that they almost seem just slightly ahead of the music from a "in the pocket" feel... like they're rushing ahead just a bit and not quite where they need to sit, but that can be tweaked in Pro Tools, no problem.

One more little nit-picky thing... in the last verse... referring to God as "she" doesn't sit well with me - and it won't others as well. Some people love that sort of thing, but others are offended. THAT ALONE might keep your track from getting chosen for sync because an editor isn't going to want to take a chance on offending people. You can't give people a REASON to say "No", you know? I'd change it to "He." But of course, that's up to you.

It's such a good track. Nice job and good luck with it! Stay in touch.

Best,

Doug Diamond
Diamondigital Media


Quote From Pro:

THC's "Broken Line" is one of the best, new, original Indie Pop tracks I've heard in awhile. It has be makings of what could definitely be a Hit and could certainly find its way into a TV show, film, commercial, or any other type of sync situation.


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