Robert Dellaposta

Robert Dellaposta

Title: Writer, A&R, Publisher
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Bio: Bob Dellaposta has over 50 years experience as a professional in the music industry.

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song: Sorry Doesn't Fit Here
artist: William Smith

genre: Pop - General
stats: playlists: 0 | song plays: 123
General Overview
What Genre is most appropriate for this song?
R & B

What is an appropriate title for this song?
sorry

What artist does this song most remind you of?
retro

What best describes the subject matter of this song?
Love & Relationships - Dysfunctional Relations

What era does this song fall under?
1980 - 1989

What best describes the mood of this song?
Sad - Cheerless

Song Analysis
Quality of Lyrics
3/5

Quality of the Hook
3/5

Quality of the Verses
3/5

Quality of the Chorus
3/5

Quality of the Breaks
3/5

Quality of Instrumentation
3/5

Quality of Arrangement
3/5

Quality of the Melody
4/5

Quality of the Chord Progression
4/5

Quality of the Instrumental Hooks
3/5

Marriage Between Chorus and Verse
4/5

Marriage Between Music and Lyrics
3/5

Instrumentation
Quality of the Instrument/Sound Selection
4/5

Quality of the Lead Performances
4/5

Quality of the Meter
3/5

Quality of Guitar
3/5

Quality of Bass
3/5

Quality of Percussion
3/5

Quality of Other Instruments
3/5

Quality of Intro/Opening Line
4/5

Vocals
Quality of the Vocal Pitch
4/5

Quality of Vocal Phrasing and Performance
4/5

Quality of Vocal
4/5

Production
Quality of Recording (Techniques)
4/5

Quality of Mix
4/5

Originality of Song
3/5

Overall Rating
3/5

Quality of the Title
3/5

General Comments

Hi William,
I'm not sure if you wrote this song for you to perform or if you want other artists to record your song. The negative story line will make it difficult to attract other artists unless they are going through a bad relationship with a woman who has constantly lied to them and they are through putting up with her. Why has he waited so long to call this bad relationship off? Has he been in denial all these years or has he kept looking the other way because he hoped she would stop lying? The form or the song is more alternative than contemporary. There are 4 verses and the verses are not all using the same meter, phrasing and rhyme scheme. This makes the song form interesting but unpredictable. If you want your listener to remember the words and music so they can sing along try to match the meter, phrasing, rhyme and melody of all the verses. The most common form for this type of retro R&B song is verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus. There are of course other forms that have worked. There are very few 4 verse songs in today's commercial market. For every slow heartbreak, sad, break-up song you write my advice is write 5 uptempo positive songs. Happy positive songs are more likely to get recorded and released in my opinion. Your vocal is good. The song feels happy and positive but the lyric is dark and gloomy. The music is well performed but again it feels more like a happy positive song in my opinion.


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Artist's Submitted Question:

lyrics,mix and what Genre should it be in

Pro's Answer/Comments:

The lyrics are fairly common. Always ask yourself this as you're writing "am i saying something new and original or has all of this been written before in a lot of other songs. If it's not a unique of fresh lyric your chances of attracting a producer or an artist are greatly reduced. If you can make them them say that they wish they had written this song then your chances of success will be enhanced. Always try to say something new and fresh if you want to catch the attention of a producer, artist or publisher. The mix is good for a retro mid-tempo R&B song.


Quote From Pro:

William Smith is a talent worth watching. His vocals and melodies are commercial and interesting. Keep your eyes and ears tuned in.


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