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Wow. This is good. It's so well done. The lyric is completely engaging, melody is fantastic, the production is good and the vocals are super-pro. Awesome. This would be on a short-list of songs that I would consider for a pop-female record. You should get great feedback from other pros on the song, but I wonder if the production might hold you back on placements as-is. If you get a placement you can totally disregard what I say, but if some time goes by and no one bites, consider the following: This song has a distinctly '80s production style. I know that's on purpose and it sounds cool, but I think it's a little too authentic, especially in the choruses. The forward motion of the synths and the motion of the vocals feel at odds with each other and it creates tension that shouldn't be part of the emotional package. You've got a really percussive vocal line paired with percussive keyboards (and the actual percussion instruments). There's a fight for rhythmic supremacy. The vocal gets covered up in places. I can understand the words well enough, but there's competition for space, and the vocal doesn't dominate. That's fine for the '80s but not for now in my opinion. Production choices are analogous to fashion choices. If you dress edgy, do it on the top or bottom - not both at the same time. It's too much to handle visually - where to focus? Too much skin or a busy outfit overwhelms on its own. It's awesome if you want that kind of attention, but there's a better way. It's the same with music and art. Pair aggressive percussion with pads. Pair busy keyboard lines with steady, unadorned drums. Smooth compliments rough. Too much aggressiveness without balance creates additional, non-artful tension. A second thing I would offer is to add more low-end to your mix. Again, though it's an 80s vibe, I think it's too 80s. Allow listeners to be nostalgic - don't carry us all-the-way back. Modern (post 1998) music has a beefy foundation that helps listeners feel grounded. I'm missing that here. Lastly, I'm confused by the bridge lyric. The song has been pumping "Girls' night out - no boys allowed!!" for awhile and then suddenly the scene changes. Now our protagonist is interested in going home with a boy (I think). What happened? Did she meet someone and abandon her girls (to go home with her new boy) or does she tell him to go away because it's "girls' night out?" I'm not sure, and the bridge is the place where your listener "gets" sure. The bridge ties everything together. If a listener still has to deal with loose ends after a bridge, the song didn't get the full story across in my opinion. To tie things up consider adding/ changing a line to "I'm 'not' going home with you (because) It's Girls Night Out." That line at the end of your bridge would make everything congruent and tight. You've got a really great song here. The story line is (slightly) obscured in important places but it may not matter. You may get this placed right away. Though if you decide the response to your work is not what you expect, adjust with these ideas in mind and see if you get better results. I hope this helps. Thank you for letting me be a part of your journey!
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Wow. This is good. It's so well done. The lyric is completely engaging, melody is fantastic, the production is good and the vocals are super-pro. Awesome.
J. Chris Griffin is heavily involved in the Music industry, working on records with John Legend, Kanye West, Madonna, Missy Elliott, Kelly Clarkson, JoJo, UK groups Mis-Teeq and The Corrs, Russian …