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Needs work the monotone vocal combined with the mono toned rhythm is more like someone reading dark lyrics over a non-music track. Lots of non music should normally bring attention to vocal. In this case all the elements cancel the intended result out. The track sets you up for a vocal that can captivate you. Instead it brings you to a hault because it all goes at the same pace.(no variation) The entro at the top is way to long. The quasi biblical rant that leads into the dogma and other commentary comes too quick. Establish weather or not your angle lyrically is horror, reality, politics or religion. as all are hinted at and used in the painting of the picture. In addition please use the curse words as seasoning do not just pull them out and add them for shock value sake. If I just listen to the lyrics I still feel as if I am caught between a stream of contiousness rant and a monotoned death march. I would say pick a point that can clearly be written towards and use a little more vocal expression to counter the monotoned nature of the backing track. and use some clever but not to sophisticated lyrical phrasing instead of jumping to cursing or street imagery. I get the dark imagery but even so you have to lead into it. Look to many we are in a dark world already, and music is very often the theme to either accompany us thru or lift and inspire us from the darkeness. Just some thoughts on communication of Ideas. In the end its your art and should reflect the inspirations of your journey. I am only making production observations and general comments about a piece of art.
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