Michael Marans

Michael Marans

Title: Music Technologist
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song: I wish you Love
artist: amy abernathy

genre: Country - Americana
stats: playlists: 13 | song plays: 450
General Overview
What Genre is most appropriate for this song?
R & B

What is an appropriate title for this song?
I Wish You Love

What artist does this song most remind you of?
Wynonna Judd

What best describes the subject matter of this song?
Inspirational - Encouragement

What era does this song fall under?
1980 - 1989

What best describes the mood of this song?
Calm - Serene

Song Analysis
Quality of Lyrics
4/5

Quality of the Hook
3/5

Quality of the Verses
4/5

Quality of the Chorus
3/5

Quality of the Breaks
3/5

Quality of Instrumentation
3/5

Quality of Arrangement
2/5

Quality of the Melody
4/5

Quality of the Chord Progression
4/5

Quality of the Instrumental Hooks
3/5

Marriage Between Chorus and Verse
4/5

Marriage Between Music and Lyrics
3/5

Instrumentation
Quality of the Instrument/Sound Selection
2/5

Quality of the Lead Performances
4/5

Quality of the Meter
4/5

Quality of Piano
3/5

Quality of Keyboards
3/5

Quality of Guitar
3/5

Quality of Bass
3/5

Quality of Percussion
3/5

Quality of Intro/Opening Line
3/5

Vocals
Quality of the Vocal Pitch
4/5

Quality of Vocal Phrasing and Performance
3/5

Quality of the Backup Vocals
4/5

Quality of Vocal
4/5

Production
Quality of Recording (Techniques)
4/5

Quality of Mix
3/5

Originality of Song
2/5

Overall Rating
3/5

Quality of the Title
3/5

General Comments

I Wish You Love has great potential. The message is uplifting, the lyrics thoughtful, and the vocal performance is sweet, strong, and sincere. Unfortunately, the very traditional instrumentation and arrangement drag the song down, giving the track a dated, unoriginal flavor---one that's truly not deserved.

I'd suggest recutting the track with an entirely new instrumental approach, one that gives each section of the song a chance to grow and flourish and offer some level of unpredictability and surprise. (Several of the later-appearing chord changes do just that...take you to a place other than the one you were expecting.) Things to try might include a piano-only intro and first verse, and instrumentation that's not so familiar, such as a fretless bass and a synth accompanied by hand percussion (or whatever). You might even want to revisit the overall feel and tempo entirely, just to take the song out of it's current '80s R&B vibe.

The point is to take the song somewhere else sonically, so that the listener hears something fresh and new. You've got a strong message and delivery. Now you need the instrumental arrangement support to bring the song home. With that in place, your lower and middle scores would all increase accordingly, and you'd have a solid track to showcase your vocals. If you're set on the traditional sound and feel, I'd recommend listening to some of the early Wynonna records (Wynonna, Tell Me Why) for inspiration.

Last critique: You vocal sounds generally effortless (a good thing), but in a few places, the phrasing is a little bit unnatural, one example being "I hope you never lose your love and Inspiration, That you get the passion that you are craving," (2nd time) where it seems as though you might be trying to fit all of the words in, instead of just letting them flow naturally. Experimentation with some alternative phrasing could yield worthwhile results.

And don't be afraid to hold back on your vocal in the beginning and belt it out at the end. Dynamics capture the listener...you've got 'em, use 'em!


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The message is uplifting, the lyrics thoughtful, and the vocal performance is sweet, strong, and sincere.


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